LitFPS? Yes, please!

I've read my share of LitRPGs so when I heard about a LitFPS I jumped at the chance to check it out. I was not disappointed. In book of Overtaken Online, video games and books collide resulting in a fun action adventure with the heat and soul of DOOM. I can't wait to read the next one!

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Disliked the MC

I just really came to dislike the main character. Also, there were some phrases used that were just off, way least for an American English speaker. I've never heard of adopted parents referred to as step parents for just one example. Things just built up the the point where I have about 3 hours left and I just don't care what happens, since I'm pretty sure the main guy isn't going to bite it.

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can't wait for more

an interesting take on the lit RPG form. it reminded me a lot of doom. with a well told story can't wait to listen to more.

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Trash

Mc is dislikable and dialog is frustratingly simple. Makes me think it is a very bad translation to english.

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Audible lies, real Harry sue

There are a total of eight reviews right now. Most of which are negative tho you would never know by looking at the overall score. The main character is written to be the softest cringiest guy. The kind of guy that wears a fedora and calls women ladies. He is so depressed over his dead wife that he constantly talks about committing suicide the first two hours, but like someone who is doing it for attention? It just feels way off. Add to that how he bounces from “I hate my life because my wife is dead” to “omg she is so pretty”, and it really feels forced. I don’t want to be too harsh here, authors have feelings too and there are lots of interesting things about the world and ideas I like but it all falls short with how it’s written. I’m not a writer so it feels unfair to criticize so heavily but there is one character that calls mc the funniest guy that has ever been in the building, another more senior veteran player tells him how cool and badass he is, and of right where I’m writing this half way through the book is literally only there to do so and to be saved by him, there is women that is there to be saved and be hot and impressed by his mad gamer skills, there is an unfortunate amount of adjective to describe everything but only the parts you already get, never the cool tech or guns or during a fight, just about how real the coma game feels, there are a ton more gripes but that should be enough. Now for the narrator. I don’t mind his voice too much his sssss noises are a little sharp and piercing, but he is a very effeminate sounding man. This kind of character when read by him really kills any bad ass feeling or manly power fantasy. I kinda don’t think he was a good choice for this book. I feel like pulpy stupid sci-fi can be saved by a good voice actor, but I don’t think anyone could really salvage this. It needed another three or four passes through a couple editors to be abridged down a bit. Again the idea of litrpg in a doom and magic world is awesome, but the writing just can’t hold up. I think with time and practice the author could nail the material but as of now this whole thing is kinda really bad.

TLDR spend your credits elsewhere. This feels like an extra long essay a high schooler got into over summer break in his intro to writing class. The narration is effeminate and flat. The world is interesting but it can’t support the writing. Try he who fights with monsters or cradle for campy litrpg executed a ways more expertly.

good litrpg but

the narrator is very bad. barely any change in voice from character to character. everyone sounds the same. very little emotion in his voice even when the character is supposed to be screaming. the only negative I have with he story is the relationship between himself and fritta feels so fake and to offer done.

sad mc

main character came off as more of a teenager than a 33 yr old adult. with both getting distracted during combat and whining every time something went wrong

it's okay

Not bad. decent world building. okay Narrator. dialog is a little odd. good progression. Not OP MC

A solid first book

Not mind blowingly good, but a solid first book in the series. I especially liked that it was light on stats till the last chapter. I will most likely pick up the 2nd book when it's released.